First script draft

Establishing shot


Camera pans from left to right of oxford from the top of st.marys tower, cuts to close up of detectives face at line "No way", detective is standing in darkened alley smoking a cigarette. narration continues throughout establishing shot.
Detective: (Narrating) It all started 6 years ago. It was my first case in the new department. Homicide. looking back on it, the promotion probably went to my head. I wanted to prove my worth to the force. I ended up in a bed for 3 months, eating food through a god-damned straw. They used to call this the city of dreaming spires... But no ones dreaming anymore. he gave me the slip once, and shit, he thought he'd gotten away with it. No way, (toking a cigarette, dirty cough) not this time. (leans into the light for the first time) This time your mine boy. (chucks cigarette on floor and stamps out)

Interrogation

Detective: You're a difficult man to find John. Do you know why we're after you? (Casual/Relaxed)

Detective: Do you know why IM after you? (Intrusive/Interrogative) 

Villain: What do you want?

Detective: Don't pretend to me, you are fully aware of why i'm here

Detective: Listen, we can either do this the easy way or we can do this the hard way.

Villain: (Runs away)

Detective: Hard way it is.

Approximately: 30-40 secs

Flashback 

Jimmy is tied to a chair in a dark room with only one bulb, the camera uses a dutch angle shot to capture the villain entering the room.

Jimmy: do you know how much shit your gonna be in for messing with a cop?

Villain: Thats the least of your worries Sergeant. 

Jimmy starts struggling and his body and face gets obscured by the villain pouring the vial into his mouth. all you can see of jimmy is his legs struggling frantically.

Approximately: 20-30 secs

*CHASE SCENE* Include - match-on-action

At the end of the chase scene the villain runs into dead end, detective catches up with gun pointed at villains head.

Approximately: 1:30

Confrontation

Detective: Time to face the music.

Villain: Times a fickle thing detective, im afraid your last song has already begun.

Detective: Cut the crap and beg like the dog you are.

Villain: For a detective, your not the sharpest of men are you?

Detective realises that during the chase scene brawl hed been stabbed with a toxin (flashback)

Villain: Ive got the cure right here in my pocket, you can still leave here with your life.

Detective: Or i could just kill you right here. Right now.

Villain: The stakes are high detective, sure you want to take the risk?

Detective: Ive always been a gambling man...(shoots villain)

Villain drops to floor, dead. Detective slumps against alley wall next to garbage can and pulls out a cigarette. Same narration from the beginning starts "They used to call this the city of dreaming spires... Coz this city's so god-damn fucked, they cant bear to ever wake up."

Approximately: 1-1.20 min

Final shot: Detective dies and hand falls to floor, cigarette rolls out of fingers and camera steadily zooms out using a crane shot.

Approximately: 15 secs